วันพฤหัสบดีที่ 8 พฤศจิกายน พ.ศ. 2550

2 model sample part 1

original sentence
As we drifted on through the summer,with this one inflexible appointment every day-classes could be cut,meals missed,Chapel skipped- I noticed something about Finny's own mind.

  • source of my sentence is from "A Separate Peace" by John Knowles
  • comments about the grammar



my own sentence
As we passed through the sad memories,with the hard time ever-living could be tough,learning was difficult-we learned many lessons from our experiences.

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Gail กล่าวว่า...

Good sentence choice. However, I am not sure you totally understand the sentence. You got into trouble when you started to write your own sentence. What do you mean by "with the hard time ever-living could be tough"? Be careful about being vague!